Bored in science class, wrote a song

Punk · 03-06-2008, 08:12 PM

That's basically what i did today in science class for an hour...

My inspiration came while writing other bands lyrics

I'm not a great writer but is it any good?

PS: I haven't finished it yet

quagmondo23 · 03-06-2008, 09:11 PM

I can't really read it. It looks like a whole lot of equations.

Ambushed · 03-06-2008, 09:39 PM

You write like my grandmother.

nexolus · 03-06-2008, 11:44 PM

lol looks like stuff i wrote in 6th grade

"here i am alone again"
"i'm falling down, can't seem to get up"

come on man... at least try for something original

oh also the "i refuse i refuse i refuse" was used in Paramore's song "Misery Business."

Vizy93 · 03-07-2008, 08:29 AM

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Originally Posted by nexolus

lol looks like stuff i wrote in 6th grade

"here i am alone again"
"i'm falling down, can't seem to get up"

come on man... at least try for something original

oh also the "i refuse i refuse i refuse" was used in Paramore's song "Misery Business."

somebody was caught!

lol just playin

Punk · 03-07-2008, 05:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by nexolus

come on man... at least try for something original

I'm not really a writer

Anyway thanks for your input

Quote:

Originally Posted by nexolus

oh also the "i refuse i refuse i refuse" was used in Paramore's song "Misery Business."

Yeah, great band.

DirtyD86 · 03-07-2008, 05:27 PM

not going to lie to you... i didnt like it. but since you consider paramore to be a great band, im guessing our expectations of music are quite different

Punk · 03-07-2008, 06:49 PM

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Originally Posted by DirtyD86

not going to lie to you... i didnt like it. but since you consider paramore to be a great band, im guessing our expectations of music are quite different

Yeah I listen to a lot of things, Metallica, Paramore, Offspring, Outkast, Benny Benassi...

Thanks for your honesty

nexolus · 03-07-2008, 10:56 PM

my comment seemed a little harsh, but it wasn't meant to be. i just do it because when i was a young writer nobody ever actually told me anything, they just said "oh that sounds nice" and never gave me any actual input.

if you actually want to write, you should read some good stuff to get ides (lord byron, keats, dickinson, shelley, etc.) instead of saying "i'm falling down, can't seem to get up" (because i'm pretty sure every kid who has ever written has said something to that exact tune) try to say it a different way, or at least be more specific/descriptive. go read "darkness" by lord byron, that'll get your thoughts going lol.

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nexolus Gold Member Join Date: Jul 2007 Posts: 472	lol looks like stuff i wrote in 6th grade "here i am alone again" "i'm falling down, can't seem to get up" come on man... at least try for something original oh also the "i refuse i refuse i refuse" was used in Paramore's song "Misery Business."

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nexolus Gold Member Join Date: Jul 2007 Posts: 472	my comment seemed a little harsh, but it wasn't meant to be. i just do it because when i was a young writer nobody ever actually told me anything, they just said "oh that sounds nice" and never gave me any actual input. if you actually want to write, you should read some good stuff to get ides (lord byron, keats, dickinson, shelley, etc.) instead of saying "i'm falling down, can't seem to get up" (because i'm pretty sure every kid who has ever written has said something to that exact tune) try to say it a different way, or at least be more specific/descriptive. go read "darkness" by lord byron, that'll get your thoughts going lol.

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