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Old 03-27-2008, 11:27 PM   #2 (permalink)
diduknowthat
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The layout looks very nice! Here's some grammatical issues i've noticed:

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We're currently working on setting up some gaming servers, for games like Call of Duty 4, Counter Strike: Source, and Team Fortress 2.
You don't need the comma between "servers" and "for".

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Here you can view our LAN parties, when they are going on.
Here you can view our LAN parties as they are going on.

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Our next LAN is coming up, on April 5th, 2008. It's a PC/Console LAN, 12pm to 12am, it will be streamed live to our website.
once again you have an extra comma between "up" and "on April 5th"
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